Thursday, January 21, 2010

Lost Love

My heart is broken.

An empty cavity fills my chest.

Jagged edges cut through my heart.

I feel no love.

My vital organ is shattered.

Love seeps through the cracks in my heart.

Passion has died with the absence you left.

Unfixable wounds pain my heart.

5 comments:

  1. WOW!! I really like your sentence diversity. But now I'm slightly depressed.

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  2. Personal favorite: "My vital organ is shattered." Brilliant, I loved these sentences.

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  3. I agree with Jenni about the depressed feeling. These are great sentences that really sound poetic and have a powerful effect.

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  4. I feel like I'm a echo, but i think these sentences are great as well. especially in there diversity and haha I also got a good laugh out of "My vital organ is shattered". I could just see some undergrad pre-med student saying that. lol

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  5. Well, they all just have so much feeling! I love all the diversity of the sentences. Nice Job!

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