My heart is broken.
An empty cavity fills my chest.
Jagged edges cut through my heart.
I feel no love.
My vital organ is shattered.
Love seeps through the cracks in my heart.
Passion has died with the absence you left.
Unfixable wounds pain my heart.
WOW!! I really like your sentence diversity. But now I'm slightly depressed.
ReplyDeletePersonal favorite: "My vital organ is shattered." Brilliant, I loved these sentences.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Jenni about the depressed feeling. These are great sentences that really sound poetic and have a powerful effect.
ReplyDeleteI feel like I'm a echo, but i think these sentences are great as well. especially in there diversity and haha I also got a good laugh out of "My vital organ is shattered". I could just see some undergrad pre-med student saying that. lol
ReplyDeleteWell, they all just have so much feeling! I love all the diversity of the sentences. Nice Job!
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